A Big Discovery and a Big Mistake by Eoin

They had found us. The people from down below had started chopping trees as if they weren’t even there. If only they had been more cautious . But, as the old saying goes, if you mess with the bull you get the horns. Every single branch had been equipped with the most hi tech gear, from the smallest, barely noticeable birch twig to the biggest , ancient oak stalk. We had also branched out to our close friends, the dogs, using them as spies.

Little did the humans know they had just pulled the trigger on a cross species war…

3 thoughts on “A Big Discovery and a Big Mistake by Eoin”

  1. Hi Eoin!
    I really enjoyed your piece! One thing that I liked about it was that you made it very interesting using descriptive words. Did you know that there are trees that cars can drive through? they’re there because people cut holes in the trunks and made them big enough for cars to get through. We also wrote about this prompt, we even got to have a skype with the maker of the 100WC Mrs. Skinner! A skype is like a video chat just in case you don’t know. One thing that I thing you could work on is using commas only when you need them.

    Happy writing!
    Keira in 5RC
    check out my blog! https://kidblog.org/class/rays-1718-pm-rockstars/posts?author=6y8z6x6jtreqjv4mmnxbu0smq&status=published&status=review&status=draft

  2. Hi Eoin!

    I really liked your story! “They had found us” is a really great opening sentence that drew me in and made me want to read more. It also set a good tone for your story, which is full of tension. This made it really interesting, and I found that when I reached the end I really wanted to find out what was going to happen next!
    I also liked how you broke up your writing, putting the last sentence by itself which made it really grab my attention.

    I hope the trees and humans could resolve their problems in the end- we do depend on them for survival after all! Did you know almost all of the oxygen that we breath was put into the air by plants?

    Keep on writing!

    Ana (Team 100WC)

    Oxford, England

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