Invasion by Kacper

An U.F.O crashed through a building and made a big crater in the field. The police investigated and saw an open door. The police were ready to shoot. Surprisingly, a little, harmless snail came out.

The police were confused and didn’t know what to do. Instead of shooting, they gave it to the scientists. The scientists thought that the police were joking. The scientists decided to take a sample and compare it to a normal snail. One scientist tried to take the a sample but the snail, with incredible speed, climbed up a drainpipe and started chewing, somehow knowing that it was the escape route.

It came down the drainpipe through the hole it made. The snail couldn’t climb but instead dropped into a spider web. The snail, not knowing what to do, tried to escape, alerting a starving spider. The spider started to crawl towards the snail…

2 thoughts on “Invasion by Kacper”

  1. Hello Kacper,
    You have written quite a uniquely original story. The elements you chose to include are interesting. A UFO, the snail, policemen, scientists and a large spider are all unusual characters that you have brought together.
    The subtle humor in your piece is wonderful. The UFO’s occupant being a snail, the snail’s escape from the scientists only to be trapped by a spider in a drainpipe, all of these plot elements work together to give the story a comedic flair.
    One way to make your writing even better is to try and find other words to substitute for ones you have used frequently. Changing words by selecting synonyms or using pronouns makes reading more enjoyable for your audience.
    Thank you for sharing you imagination,
    Gina Ruffcorn (Team 100, Iowa USA)

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