The Attack (Week 21 Paddy 6th)

“Minion!” said a voice from the massive leather chair in the centre of the room.

“Ready the Deady Bears!”

“Yes master,” replied a whimpering voice.

There was the noise of a button being clicked and an enormous mechanical claw came down from the ceiling, holding a crate. From within that crate a scratching noise was echoing ,with the occasional grunt. The crate burst open with a splintering noise and out came… millions of adorable, plush bears.

“Gaah! Minion what have you done?! My weapons!”

“I’m not your minion. I’m FBI Agent Turncoat and you’re under arrest!”

“Dang and blast!” roared the evil villain. And that is how teddy bears came into the world.

2 thoughts on “The Attack (Week 21 Paddy 6th)”

  1. What a super opening that immediately catches the reader’s attention Paddy. I almost heard the booming voice jumping from the screen … or my speakers?! You’ve also done a great job of punctuating the dialogue between the two characters. Impressive, but I particularly liked that you worked hard to include such descriptive terms to help bring the story to life in my mind. I wonder though, what name would such an evil villain have …?
    Well done and keep rising to the Challenge.

  2. Hi Paddy,
    I really enjoyed your story. I like the term ‘Deady Bears’ but was a bit worried about what was going to happen. I was thrilled to read that agent turncoat (excellent choice of name) was there to save the day!
    You have used some excellent vocabulary and fantastic adjectives in your story.
    Great job with the prompt this week.
    Ms Brennock

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