THE SHARK by Noel WEEK 5

Yesterday, I went to see a movie called,” The Meg (Megeladon)”. It was a bit like Jaws. It reminded me a time when I was jetskiing with my cousins. A baby shark swam up from beneath me and snapped at the jetski . Although it was a baby shark I didn’t know that at the time. After this we skied back to shore as fast as we could. Anyway the movie was 2 and a half hours long. We then got KFC on the way home.

One thought on “THE SHARK by Noel WEEK 5”

  1. Nice use of the flashback! It shows that you understand what you are trying to deliver, which is good. Now, you should show that the shark is indeed scary. Think about how it tried to snap at you. Did the shark show its razor-sharp teeth or ghostly grey silhouette? You have a very good idea; you just need to improve on how you deliver it.

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