Week 18: Eerie Estate By Naglis

“Bye, Mom!” I shouted cheerfully.

Strolling peacefully through town, I walked past an estate I’ve never seen before. But there was one house that stood out. The dry, bare grass was turning into a sandy colour, the tree was losing its leaves and the windows were boarded up carelessly. I tried to erase it from my memory while listening to joyful catchy songs. I glanced down the hill and I could make out the bully, Seth, darting towards me. I hopped on the nearest bike and skedaddled away.

“But it is so slow,” I muttered.

I dashed into the eerie house without thinking. As soon as the door slammed shut I knew I was doomed…

2 thoughts on “Week 18: Eerie Estate By Naglis”

  1. Well Naglis your 100 word challenge had me gripped from the word go! I love mysteries and this certainly has all the marks of a great mystery. I love how you lull the reader into a false sense of security at the beginning of your piece where you describe the sights as you’re ‘strolling peacefully through town’ and then we get to the house that stood out and the bully coming towards you and all changes very quickly. You’ve left the story on a brilliant cliffhanger and I for one would really like to know what happens next. Excellent writing for the hundred word challenge. Well done.
    Máire O’Keeffe
    Team 100WC

  2. I LOVE your word use. This is a really good writing piece. Keep writing.


Comments are closed.