Week 29 : Creepy night by David

I was walking through the misty wind on my way to my best friend’s house. It was seven thirty at night.The dark sky was turning from black to crimson every few minutes. It was a really scary night. But I had to do it if I wanted to meet my friend at his house.

And so I had come to the scariest point when I had to cross the graveyard. So I saw my grandfathers grave as I walked past.I  came to the end of the graveyard when some man shone his headlights at my face … offering a ride to my friends house.

I said no and ran…..







3 thoughts on “Week 29 : Creepy night by David”

  1. Amazing story!
    *Everything was great, adjectives, vocabulary!
    Well done, keep up the good work! 🙂

  2. Hi David,
    I liked how you incorporated the five bolded words. Did you know our class was the one that came up with the five words? I also like how you left the story at a cliffhanger when you said “I said no and ran…..”
    Sincerely, Will in Illinois in the United States

  3. Hi David! i think your story is great! I really like how the story just gets scarier,
    It was very detailed too but i also found one error, you forgot too words,
    “Shouted” and “Frantically” next time i think you could try to remember to add those words.
    My class posted about the same prompt. I wrote about something kind of similar,
    But overall, Your story is awesome!
    Come check out my story —https://kidblog.org/class/rays-1718-am-rockstars/posts/cww4jjt68oj4lyqvmrky5amkl

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