Week 36 The Dangerman By Matthew D

There I was with my dad at the local bank when all of a sudden a badly dressed man came in. I could see something under his coat but I couldn’t make it out. He stood at the back of the line with a big smirk on his  face. I could see his golden teeth inside his rotting mouth. Then a gun emerged from his coat. That’s when I knew I should run. I sprinted down the street, my dad tearing up behind me. I could hear gunshots. I turned the corner and a bullet whizzed past my head. Then a man in front of me collapsed…

One thought on “Week 36 The Dangerman By Matthew D”

  1. Hi Matthew,
    Your story is very exciting and well-written. You described the villain very well and your use of the verbs ‘sprinted’ and ‘tearing’ are very good too. You created a very convincing feeling of tension followed by panic and chaos. Great writing. Keep it up.
    Mrs O Sullivan.

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